Tuesday, March 15, 2011

A story that needed to use more minimalism!

“A Jury of Her Peers” by Susan Glaspell was one short story that made one fact last way to long. I felt that this story would have done very well to have used a little bit more minimalism than so much description. I got so distracted in reading this story that it took me days to get all the way through it.
The ending was no surprise. With so many details thrown at you all at once you knew almost from the time they stepped into the door and Mr. Hale started telling his story who the killer was and it didn’t take long to figure out why before the women figured it out.
I would have to read a sentence over and over before I could get all the way through it and halfway through the story I had to start back over from the beginning. The story just seemed to drag on and on and on. Some sentences were so long and had too many descriptions for just one item. They just seem to never end. For example, on page 193, paragraph 68; the cabinet that Mrs. Wright kept her jam in was described to death. I had to read the sentence over and over. Then realized the description really didn’t matter to the story.
I felt that this story could have been delivered so much better than it was. Don’t get me wrong I liked stories that add descriptions like “Blue Winds Dancing” by Tom Whitecloud, but the descriptions in this story did not seem to help me paint a feeling it just frustrated me and made me count pages to see when the story would end!

2 comments:

  1. If your concept was a facebook status I would 'like' it. Haha I honestly could not get over how long the story was just going on and on with the overkill of the tiniest details.

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  2. lol I actually enjoyed the details... but really don't like minimalism because I feel it doesn't give me the whole picture.

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